[engels] verbetering schrijfoefening

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verbetering schrijfoefening

Hallo,

Zou er iemand mijn schrijfoefening kunnen nakijken van engels?

Er zitten waarschijnlijk heel veel fouten in want taalgevoel heb ik niet echt.

Alvast bedankt!

When I was young there were a lot of studies that I wanted to do. First, like a lot of young men, I wanted to be fireman. My second choice was to learn fly with an airplane. At last, I wanted be a police officer. Now it’s time to choose a subject and it is not the dream jobs when I was child. I enjoy learning about the biology of the human body. In the casino of Ostend, there was the human body exhibition. I found it interesting. I love science (especially biology and chemistry), it teaches you about everything in the world. Biology is interesting because it will tell you how you are made. You learn the process inside your body. Learn about animals and plants is also fascinating. Mathematic is not my favourite subject but it is better then Dutch, German, French and English. When you make an exercise in Maths, the answer is right or wrong. Not like English or other languages. Languages are very difficult because I don’t have linguistic feeling. Gym is a cool subject, you also do fun games, but studying physical education is nothing for me. Basically, I have always in mind that I wanted to do something with medical subjects. I think pharmacy or medicine. I like patient contact.

I don’t know if pharmacy is for me. It’s a fascinating job to educate patients about their medication and how to take it. It is a study with a lot of sciences; chemistry, biochemistry, physics and mathematics. Biology is more memorising than Chemistry. I find it cool to help people, to work closely with people every day. You can do many things with a diploma of pharmacist. Working in a clinic if clinical pharmacist. There is always the option going into an industry career and you can also work in a lab.

Pharmacy is less stressful and has nicer hours than Medicine. When you are a doctor, you must to work hours. Doctors often work long and don’t have as much time to spend with family and friends. A lot of responsibilities, it can be stressful, making a mistake, losing patients,… I think that it sometimes difficult to discuss with patients when the patient has a terminal illness. How to say it to the patient and the family. Doctor and family is difficult to combine.

I think that the studies medicine are more interesting than Pharmacy. It has more medical subjects. Every day brings different patients with different illness, it is a various job. It is difficult for me to concentrate in studies for long hours. (example an exam period) I like taking 10 minutes break each one hour studying or each one and half hour studying.

To earn much money is not important in my life but without money you simply die. I want to choose a dream job and not a job for the money. There are a lot of things that more important than money just like friendship, the feel with your parents,… Those things can't buy with money! When you are sick whatever you try you can’t buy your health. Later, I want working in team because two heads are better than one but I don’t have a problem with working alone.

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First, like a lot of young men, I wanted to be fireman. My second choice was to learn fly with an airplane
First, like many children, I wanted to be a fireman. My second choice was to become a pilot.
it is not the dream jobs when I was child.
it won't be any of my childhood dream jobs
Learn about animals and plants is also fascinating. Mathematic is not my favourite subject but it is better then Dutch, German, French and English.
LearnING about ... MathematicS .... thAN
in Maths, the answer is right or wrong. Not like English or other languages
in maths, the answer is right or wrong, unlike in English or other languages
I like patient contact.
I like contact with patients
There is always the option going into an industry career
There is always the option of persuing an industry career.
When you are a doctor, you must to work hours. Doctors often work long and don’t have as much time to spend with family and friends. A lot of responsibilities, it can be stressful, making a mistake, losing patients,… I think that it sometimes difficult to discuss with patients when the patient has a terminal illness. How to say it to the patient and the family. Doctor and family is difficult to combine.
As a doctor you must work long hours. Because of this, doctors don't have much time to spend with family and friends. They have a lot of responsibilities, their work can be stressful. Making a mistake may mean losing a patient. I think it can is difficult to tell patients and their family they have a terminal illness. I would ponder over how to bring such terrible news to them.
I think that the studies medicine are more interesting than Pharmacy.
I think studying medicines is more interesting than pharmacy
There are a lot of things that more important than money just like friendship, the feel with your parents,… Those things can't buy with money! When you are sick whatever you try you can’t buy your health. Later, I want working in team because two heads are better than one but I don’t have a problem with working alone.
There are many things that are more important than money, like friendship, the relationship with your parents, ... Those are things money can't buy. When you are ill, you won't be able to buy health. Later, working in a team would be great (teamwork is fantastic, it allows you to blame someone else if things go wrong), though I don't have a problem with working alone either.
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"at last" betekent "hèhè, éindelijk......"
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Correcties in rood aangegeven.

Zoals al vaker opgemerkt bij andere correcties: in geschreven Engels moet men altijd “I will not” of “it is” enz. voluit schrijven, nooit als “it’s” enz.

When I was young, there were a lot of studies that I wanted to do. First, like a lot of children, I wanted to be a fireman. My second choice was to learn to fly an airplane. Finally, I wanted to become a police officer. Now it’s time to choose a subject and it will not be for the jobs I dreamt of when I was child. I enjoy learning about the biology of the human body. In the casino of Ostend, there was the human body exhibition. I found it interesting. I love science (especially biology and chemistry), it teaches you about everything in the world. Biology is interesting because it will tell you how you are made. You learn all about the processes inside the human body. Learning about animals and plants is also fascinating. Mathematics is not my favourite subject but it is better than Dutch, German, French and English. When you do an exercise in Maths, the answer is either right or wrong, unlike in English or any other language. Languages are very difficult because I don’t have any linguistic feeling. Gym is a cool subject, you also do fun games, but studying physical education is not for me. Basically, I always keep in mind that I want to do something related to medicine, such as pharmacy or medicine itself. I like being in contact with patients.

I don’t know if pharmacy is for me, though. It’s a fascinating job to educate patients about their medication and how they should take it. It is a study with a lot of sciences; chemistry, biochemistry, physics and mathematics. Biology is more memorising than Chemistry. I find it cool to help people, to work closely with people every day. You can do many things with a pharmacy diploma, such as working in a clinic as a clinical pharmacist. There is always the option of entering a career in industry and you can also work in a lab.



Pharmacy is less stressful and has better working hours than medicine. When you are a doctor, you must work long hours. As a result, doctors don’t have much time to spend with family and friends. The job entails a lot of responsibilities, it can be stressful, when you make a mistake you could lose a patient,… I think that it sometimes is difficult to tell patients that they have a terminal illness. How do you tell this to the patient and the family. Being a doctor and having a family is difficult to combine.

I think that studying medicine is more interesting than pharmacy, because it has more medical subjects. Every day brings you different patients with different illnesses, it is a varying job. It is difficult for me to concentrate in studies for long hours (for example an exam period). I like taking a 10 minute break from studying every one or one and a half hours.

Earning a lot of money is not important for me but without money you simply cannot survive. I want to choose my dream job and not a job for the money. There are a lot of things that are more important than money, such as friendship, the relationship with one’s parents,… Those things you can't buy with money! When you are ill, it is impossible to buy your health. Later, I want to work in a team because two minds are better than one, but I don’t have a problem with working alone.
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Dank u wel iedereen!!!

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